GRE写作官方题库高频ARGUMENT题目满分范文分享：planning for retirement
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The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement:
"Because of its spectacular natural beauty and consistent climate, Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. As a bonus, housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and real estate taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Nevertheless, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. Retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
The argument presented in this article indicates that Clearview should be the top choice for retirees. Clearview's consistent climate and natural beauty, it's falling housing costs, comparatively low property taxes, the mayor's promises for continued improvement to services and excellent health care are all cited as reasons. While Clearview seems like the perfect choice, the argument itself is less than persuasive. Let’s explore.
本段采用了标准的Argument开头段结构，即：C – E - F的开头结构，首句概括原文的C(Conclusion)。接下来的一句话概括了原文为了支持他的结论所引用的E(Evidence)。最后尾句中给出开头段到正文段的过渡句，指出原文在逻辑上存在F(Flaw)。
本段作为Argument开头段，具体功能就在发起攻击。首先，概括原文的结论：Clearview(简称C)是退休者最好的选择。接下来分别列举了原文为了支持这个结论引用的证据：Clearview的consistent climate and natural beauty，下降的房价，相对低的property taxes以及市长关于提到health care的承诺。引用的论据的归纳用于铺垫出正文段的具体攻击。最后点出原文存在逻辑错误，引出后面的分析。
For starters, lets consider consistent climate and natural beauty as a reason for Clearview to take the top spot. These factors are probably some but not all retirees. For many it is probably more important to live near relatives or even to enjoy changing seasons.
本段作为正文第二段，攻击文章犯的主要逻辑错误：因果类错误。作者认为退休者未必把意气候和自然风光当成top choice。作者提出退休者可能更加关注的其他事物来驳斥原文，例如，close to relatives, enjoy changing season.
Also, Clearview's declining housing costs do not necessarily make Clearview the best place to retire for two reasons: despite the decline, Clearview's housing costs might be comparably high nation wide and for wealthier retirees housing costs are not likely to be a factor in choosing a place to retire. Thus the mere fact that housing costs have been in decline shouldn’t send people rushing to retire in Clearview.
本段作为正文第三段，攻击文章犯的主要逻辑错误：错误因果。作者认为property taxes 不一定是退休者要考虑养老的首要因素。作者提出，退休者一般有其他选择而且 well-off financially，因此就property taxes而把C地当成养老的首要选择是不正确的。
Yet another problem with the argument involves the mayor's promises. In light of Clearview's low property-tax rates, one should wonder if the mayor would be able to follow through. Absent any explanation of how the city can spend more money in the areas cited without raising property taxes, one simply cannot accept the editorial's recommendation.
本段采用了标准的Argument结尾段结构，即：C – S的结尾结构，首先再次重申原文的站不住脚的Conclusion，接下来给出给合理建议Suggestion。
本段作为Argument结尾段，具体功能就总结归纳+建议措施，首先再次重申：原文的论断是没有说服力的。接下来作者给出几条建议：一是通过引用调查来说明retirees关注consistent climate and natural beauty，declining house rate等因素;二是具体说明改善health care的政策会落实;最后说明C地区平均医生比例高于其他地方。这几条建议含蓄的隐射前面的错误，前后呼应，文章有力结尾，浑然一体。